Silence by the screen

Hi. I am Stella! Ladies and gentlemen, I want to you to listen carefully. We live in a society, where the only thing that we can enjoy in life is our smartphones. When I was 5 years old, I went to the park with my mom. I had a book in one hand and a toy in the other.At the park, there were boys and girls who laughed and shared conversation withone another. But now, the park is silent. There is no one there. There isnothing except the sound of the buttons texting. I heard that there isan application onour smartphone that helps us to have the medical exams at home. In just one click,it will scan your skin and tell you everything you will know from a regularmedical exam. Isn???t it really ironic? Our smartphone can check everything thatis helpful for our health problems. However, these helpful smartphones give usmany problems. Actually, the number of patients seeing the ophthalmologists is increasing because of the computer vision syndrome like eye soreness, blurry vision,headaches, dizziness and muscle strains.

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-Computer vision syndrome(CVS) alsoreferred to as Digital Eye Strain, describes a group of eye and vision-relatedproblems that result from prolonged computer, tablet,e-reader and cell phone use

-ophthalmologistis a doctor who is an expert in illnesses of the eyes and who can performoperations on people's eyes.

Hello Stella! This is just your first draft, but it's already thought- provoking. I'm excited to read the second part of your speech.  I personally like the theme. Keep it up!