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my journal-07.25

작성자 : cyj***   ·   2017-07-27

Title : My best friend's house

Today, I went to my best friend's house.Her name is 이예운. She is considerate and care her friends. My best friend is her. However I went to her house. At her house I ate some cookies. I went to the market and bought some noodle, ice cream, and 쥐포. When I came back I massaged my mother and her mom so I got 1000won. I was very happy and proud!!! I saved that money in my new piggy bank.
When I all saved my money I will buy a big hotel in U.S.A. When I buy I will say "Come to my hotel". My best friend will be my forever friend. Thank you for listening my speech.^___________^

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Title:My best friend's house

 

Today,I went to my best friend's house. Her name is ??¿¹¿?. Sheis considerate and cares for herfriends. She is my best friend. Today, I went to her house and I ate some cookies. I went to the market and bought somenoodle, ice cream, and ??Æ÷. When I came back, I massaged my mother and her mom so I got 1000won. I wasvery happy and proud!!! I saved that money in my new piggy bank.

WhenI can save all my money, I will buy a big hotel in U.S.A. When I buy, I will say, "Come to myhotel". My best friend will be my forever friend. Thank you for listeningmy speech.^___________^

 

HelloChloe! I am surprised because I wasn't expecting you to share something herebut I am very happy to read your speech! I'm glad that you had a wonderful timewith your best friend. I hope that you and your best friend will have more funmemories to share with. BE HAPPY!!! J

 

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