I think having just one friend is not good because first, when my best friends don'tplay with me, I will stillhave lots of friends. In this story, Elton just has onebest friend Robbie, but Robbie makes lots of friends.So, Robbie is not alone,however, Elton is lonely.
To make lots of friends, you should bekind to your friends. Most children lovekind friends and not a bad friend. So,don't get angryto your friends. Givesome school supplies when they don't have that. I like friends that are kindand good at plays. So,maybe other friends will like it, too. One problem isthat when they don't have friends, they would be alone. Inmy school, there is ¹?¿¹??. He is bullied by some of my classmates. He is sometimes hit by otherfriends or says somebad word at him. Ithink he wants to cry or die. Many people don't help himbecause they're not hisfriend. He just shouted to other friends and speak some bad words to them so many childrendon't like him. As a result, having lots of friends is a decision not to be bullied by other. Havinglots of friends are good foryou~!

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1. I think having just one friend is not good because first, when my best friends don'tplay with me, I will stillhave lots of friends. (In yourcomposition, you said 'one friends'. It's important for you to be mindful ofthe number that you use. You mentioned 'one' so the word should be in singularform.)

    

2. Robbie makes lots of friends. So,Robbie is not alone, however, Eltonis lonely. (However is added here becausewe are comparing situations of the characters. The word 'however' is better tobe used than the word 'but')

    

3. One problem isthat when they don't have friends, they would be alone. Inmy school, there is ¹?¿¹??. He is bullied by some of my classmates. He is sometimes hit by otherfriends or says somebad word at him. Ithink he wants to cry or die. (In this part, if you observe, two clausesare separated by a comma. The first clause is a dependent clause which means itcannot stand alone or the idea is incomplete. The second clause can stand alonebecause the idea is complete. Kindly read your composition and this revision soyou will see the difference even though the ideas are still the same.)

Hello, Helen! Thank you for this. Iappreciate your work. J I made some revisionsto improve your ideas here. These are only few things that you need to improve becauseyour ideas are good. However, you just need to work on how you compose yourwords into better sentences. Keep on improving, Helen! You are already doinggreat but I know you still have a lot in store within you. Aja!