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작성자 : sei*** · 2017-06-01
Why national lotteries should be abolished:
1.Because people can be addicted to national lotteries.
2.That's because people might break myself because of national lotteries.
3.People can be depress because of national lotteries.
Why national lotteries should not be abolished:
1.Some of the profit from the national lotteries are spent to help the poor.
2.Give hope to the people.
3.Like sports lotteries are fun to enjoy the games.
1.Because people can be addicted to national lotteries.
2.That's because people might break myself because of national lotteries.
3.People can be depress because of national lotteries.
Why national lotteries should not be abolished:
1.Some of the profit from the national lotteries are spent to help the poor.
2.Give hope to the people.
3.Like sports lotteries are fun to enjoy the games.
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Why national lotteries should be abolished:
1. Because the people can be addicted to national lotteries.
2.That's because people might break myself because of national lotteries.(Rephrase your statement)
3. People who participated in national lotteries can be lead to depression because of national lotteries.
Why national lotteries should not be abolished:
1.Some of the profit from the national lotteries are spent to help the poor people.
2.Give hope to the people.
3. Like sports, lotteries are fun to just like how we enjoy the playing games.
Reminder:
1. Organize your thoughts. Just like in number 2, I don't get it what you are trying to say. ^_^
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