Inthe winter of 2016, I went to Malvern in Australia. It was a special experienceto me because it was my first time to live in another nation that has anotherculture. Malvern's city was very nice. There were big buildings and amagnificent church. I am not a Catholic but I moved in that church. Finally,I saw beautiful beaches, mountains, and many natural environments. Iwant to go there again.

POINTS TOREMEMBER:

-Capitalization

-Spelling

-WordComposition

Hello,Louie! Here are few things you need to be mindful of.

Firstis capitalization. Again, sentences should begin in capital letters.

Secondis the spelling of the words environment, Catholic, and believer.

Thirdis the word composition. You stated "at 2016 winter". It should be "In the winterof 2016".

>>>>Keep on improving,Louie!<<<<Teacher Abby>>>>