I don't think that fighting is not the right thing to do (becuase) because if they want everybody to (belive) believe in their goddess god then they could just tell us so. And I think they are selfish. Many people are dying because of them. They should think of other people too. In Syria children are dying and they can't go to school unlike us. I'm feel sorry for them. Grownups should realize that (because) because of their this war. many children are dying. I hope they will end this war quickly. Only if there could be no wars in earth that It would be great if there will be no wars in Earth.

Things to remember:

1. Spelling (ex. because)

2. Conjunction (ex. and )

3. Avoid redundancy (avoid repetition of words in your sentences or paragraph)

4. Future tense

Hello Wanda! awesome job for pouring out your opinions about the war in Syria. Way to go. Keep on improving. :)

T. Remia <3