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작성자 : lov*** · 2017-04-20
Hello teacher........~~
I think I want to go to Iran's New Year's Day.
Because I think when I'm runing in front of fire joyfully, I think it will feel nice and fun.
And also It's fun to organize the picnic and talking with friends or families~~
That is my opinion.
Bye^^
I think I want to go to Iran's New Year's Day.
Because I think when I'm runing in front of fire joyfully, I think it will feel nice and fun.
And also It's fun to organize the picnic and talking with friends or families~~
That is my opinion.
Bye^^
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Hello, Teacher! ✓
I think I want to go to Iran's New Year's Day. ✓
Because, I think when I run in front of the fire joyfully, I think it will feel nice and fun.
[explanation: Let's be careful in choosing the tenses of the verbs that we will use in making our sentences. ]
And also It's fun to organize a picnic and talk with friends or families.
[explanation: Let's review the proper usage of articles.]
That is my opinion.
Bye^^
I think I want to go to Iran's New Year's Day. ✓
Because, I think when I run in front of the fire joyfully, I think it will feel nice and fun.
[explanation: Let's be careful in choosing the tenses of the verbs that we will use in making our sentences. ]
And also It's fun to organize a picnic and talk with friends or families.
[explanation: Let's review the proper usage of articles.]
That is my opinion.
Bye^^