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If we want to stay healthy(homework)
작성자 : bos*** · 2017-02-16
If we want to stay healthy we should
drink lot of water, because in our body,
water is 70%.
so when we drink little,
we can be very thirsty or die.
because of that, we have to
drink many water.
drink lot of water, because in our body,
water is 70%.
so when we drink little,
we can be very thirsty or die.
because of that, we have to
drink many water.
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If we wan to stay healthy we should drink plenty of water, because in our body is made up of 70% water. So, if we don't, we will be thirsty or we might die. That's the reason why we should drink plenty of water.
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Thank you so much Jack! You're right so you should drink plenty of water. See you later.