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The violin contest!!~~

작성자 : syw***   ·   2017-01-18

On Saturday this week is very special day because it is my second violin contest. When I was 1 grade, I went to the violin contest first. I get a third place, but it was a big prize because I get third place in the 1 grade to 6 grade. I am little nervous because I would be very sad if I was wrong many time and doesn`t gat any prize. I am exited too because if I get any prize, I will be very happy. I have to be perfect because there are 100 people and my mom and even my older brother will come to the violin contest. I want to be first prize because I will be very very happy. Also, I will show the video with my phone to my grandparents too. I can be perfect because I am practicing every day and my Jesus will help me. I can do it!

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           On Saturday this week will be a very special day because it is my second violin contest. When I was in 1st grade, I joined a violin contest for the first time. I got the third place. It was a big prize because I got the third place for 1st grade to 6th grade students. I was a little nervous because I would be very sad if I got a lot of wrong answers and didn't get any prize. I am excited too because if I get any prize on Saturday, I will be very happy. I have to be perfect because there will be 100 people there and my mom and even my older brother will come to the violin contest. I want to get the first prize because I will be very happy. Also, I will show the video in my phone to my grandparents. I can be perfect because I practice every day and my Jesus will help me. I can do it!

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Wow! Thank you so much for telling Teacher about this. I know that you can do it. Yes, Jesus will help you with that! ^^ Just do your best and enjoy your performance.  

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