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CORRECTION:

What is a successful life? I think a successful life is not always about having money. The best example I could give to further explain this is Mother Teresa. She was not rich but she saved a lot of people. She had genuine compassion for others. She?dedicated her entire life to helping the poor. Unlike her, ordinary people are materialistic. They?blindedly worship material wealth and they are very focused at work neglecting the real essence of being human. They believe that success is measured by how much money you have. Nevertheless, the bottomline here is the belief/idea of helping the poor is more important than earning money made Mother Teresa successful.

FEEDBACK:

*What is a successful life?* -? We can also say "How do you define success? / How do you define a successful life? / What is the real definition of success?"

*a* - Having the article "a" should be there to refer to the word "life" which is singular.

*not always about having money* -? This is more clear and more specific.

*The best example I could give to further explain this is Mother Teresa -? What you wrote is already correct but I thought of putting a more detailed and more specific transition.

*genuine*- There's nothing wrong with your sentence. I just added this word to make it better since we know that Mother Teresa has genuine compassion for the poor.

*to helping the poor* - Let's analyze the sentence "She dedicated her life to help the poor." Focus on the first phrase "She dedicated her life to," so that means the next word should be an object where she dedicated her life to. It's similar to saying "I dedicated my life to my family." or "I dedicated my life to doing my passion." So if we say, "She dedicated her life to help the poor, " is wrong because the two phrases are not related. To further understand this, you can study the rules of gerund and infinitives.

*her* - We should learn how to use pronouns. Using the subject's name over and over again will make the article redundant.

*are materialistic* - "is material ones" is grammatically wrong.

* They?blindedly worship material wealth and they are very focused at work neglecting the real essence of being human.*? - I made this to make your sentence better.

*Nevertheless* - I have told you before that it is very important to use transitions when writing articles.

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THANK YOU SO MUCH, SUN! I appreciate it when you write compositions regularly. Please put MUCH MORE EFFORT in writing. Avoid making the same mistakes and start using transitions. Learn how to end it properly. Put more details on your spoints.?Last, names of people should always be in capital letters at the beginning.

THANK YOU, SUN! HAPPY NEW YEAR!

- TEACHER LIZZY

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