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why do many people try to have a healty life style?
작성자 : eug*** · 2016-11-11
If they don't have a healthy life style, they can die early, and can get diseases easily. But, if you have a healthy life style, you'll be still healthy when you are old. And, you can live longer.
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If they don't have a healthy lifestyle, they will die early. They are also prone to illnesses. But, if you have a healthy lifestyle, you'll remain healthy when you grow old. And, you can live longer.
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