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작성자 : joj***   ·   2016-08-17

It I'm a american I will stop this problem by treating black slaves kindly. I once read in a book that we could stop war by peace and try being united then you'll be united. Like that I said try being united then you will be united. In this problem this two sides are white and black. They kill each other. And also hate each other so I think it is the best way to apologize to each other.

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           If I'm an American, I will would stop this problem by treating black slaves people kindly. I once read in a book that we could stop war by peace and try being united then you'll be united. Like that I said try being united then you will be united. In this problem, this the two sides are white and black. They kill each other. and also hate each other so I think it is the best way to solve this is to apologize to each other one another.


==> If I am an American, I would stop this problem by treating black people or African American kindly. I once read in a book that we could stop war by peace and being united. In this problem, the two sides are white and black. They kill and hate each other, so I think the way to solve this is to apologize to one another.




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