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The criminal activities(Think before acting!)
작성자 : joj*** · 2016-05-04
There are criminals who stealing things.
I think stealing is bad because if someone steals some money the person who has been stolen will be angry. and it will be hard for him /her to live without money. And the bad thing for the theif is that it will go to jail if that theif stole the money.
I hope these persons think beofre acting
I think stealing is bad because if someone steals some money the person who has been stolen will be angry. and it will be hard for him /her to live without money. And the bad thing for the theif is that it will go to jail if that theif stole the money.
I hope these persons think beofre acting
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There are criminals who steal things.
I think stealing is bad because if someone steals some money, the person who has been stolen will be angry and it will be hard for him /her to live without money. And the bad thing for the thief is that he will be imprisoned once caught.
I hope these people think before they act.
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Great job for sharing your ideas Wanda! J