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작성자 : diz***   ·   2016-04-06

Dear Lizzy

Thank you for your patience of yesterday.
I was too tired, so I couldn't express my idea.
How have you been doing? I hope you have a nice hump day.

These days Korea comes into bloom. Yellow and pink flowaers are in full bloom. The scenery makes me feel a little bit sad. Maybe because it is too beautiful.


Yesterday we had somd conversation why I hate the dags. I said the reason is the people who have dogs. I would like to say three problems.

First, in Korea, every dogs is on a leash at the public place. But many dog owners don't mind releasing their dogs. But I've heard several accidents people had been attacked by their pet. Even several of them lost their face and babies from the accidents. They said their dogs were not fierce. Dog person think that they're understanding their dogs, but how about other people? Especially, I have been attacked by small dog. And there are a lot of children and senior citizen at the park.

The other one is the problem about missing their dogs. I like hiking so I use to go moutain trail near by my house(I live just entrance of moutain.) at the weekends. When I go hiking, I can always hear certain sounds. That is "My dog, Where are you? Come here, Mom is here." The dog owners shout all over the place.
The stray dog problem is a big issue in Korea. I just can't understand why they wouldn't miss their dogs even in the moutain.

The last thing is about an old conflict in Korea. Korean misunderstand about cats and many of them hate cats. Cats are only one species who can live in the wild with a human. They are clever and clean. Sometimes they scavenge from people's garbage, but people threw their garbage everywhere.
Some of Korean commit acts of terrorism to cats and a cat person. They kill th cat and are often threaten to say to cat person "I'll do something on you." But this is not a crime in Korea. I think that peoplpe think this planet exist for only human. I feel sad and anger When I heard this kind of news.

This letter is so long. Thank you for reading.


Sincerely,

Yumyum

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CORRECTION/S:

Dear Lizzy

Thank you for your patience yesterday.
I was too tired, so I couldn't express my idea.
Anyway, how have you been doing? I hope you have a nice "hump" day.

These days Korea comes into its bloom. Yellow and pink flowers are in full bloom everywhere. The scenery makes me feel a little bit sad. Maybe because it is too beautiful.

Yesterday we had a conversation about why I hate the dogs. I said the reason is the people who have dogs. To further explain this, I would like to tell you three problems I commonly see.

First, in Korea, every dogs is on a leash at the public place and the owners don't mind releasing them. This causes several accidents where in people had been attacked by their pets. Many of them even lost their faces and babies from the accidents. They said their dogs were not fierce. the owners think they could understand their dogs, but how about other people? Especially me, I have been attacked by a small dog. There are also a lot of children and senior citizen at the park.

The other one is the problem about missingdogs. I like hiking so I used to go on a moutain trail near by my house (I live just near the entrance of the moutain.) on the weekends. When I go hiking, I can always hear certain sounds like "My dog! Where are you? Come here! Mom is here." The dog owners shout all over the place.The stray dog problem is a big issue in Korea. I just can't understand why they wouldn't miss their dogs even in the moutain.

The last thing is about an old conflict in Korea. Koreans misunderstand cats and many of them hate cats. Cats are only one of the species that can live in the wild with a human. They are clever and clean. Sometimes they scavenge from people's garbage, but people throw their garbage everywhere.
Some Koreans commit acts of terrorism to cats and a cat person. They kill the cat and are often threaten to say to cat person "I'll do something on you." But this is not a crime in Korea. I think that people think this planet exists only for humans. I feel sad and angry when I hear this kind of news.

This letter is so long. Thank you for reading.

Sincerely,
Yumyum



FEEDBACK:

I appreciate this long letter of yours. It seems like you have expressed yourself deep enough. Your opinion about cats and dogs and how your citizens act toward these animals is no longer new to me. It does exist in the Philippines as well. However, as how I see it, the number of people who loves dogs in this country is greater than the humber of those who love cats. That maybe be because "runaway cats" and "abandoned cats" are so rampant on the street.




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