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What do your parents want you to be? How is it different from what you want to be?
작성자 : jun*** · 2016-03-31
My parent said they wish the thing that I want to do.So my wish is to be a soccer player.So there's no different that my father and mother want to be.I will work on being a very good soccer player.I want to be soccer player because that is the thing I am doing the most good.
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My parents said they wish for whatever I want to be. So my wish is to be a soccer player. It's not different from what my father and mother want me to be. I will work on being a very good soccer player. I want to be a soccer player because that is something I do best.
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