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Gender Role
작성자 : amy*** · 2016-02-25
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I think most interesting topic is 'Gender Role'becase it can cast away a prejdice that girl need to raise a child or children. I will be relateed to a alien thatn are bread winner so it could help to not have a gender roles or something because ailen will do it!!!Maybe the science develop, it could be a real!!!Also it related becase, it could be a creative thinge that could be a bread winner!!!
==> I think Gender Role is one of the most important topics because it can dispel the prejudice that a woman needs to raise a child or children. An alien can help us because it will help a bread winner to do his or her responsibilities. Maybe Science can help us to develop it, so it could be real. Also, it could be a creative way to be a bread winner.
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Hi, Amy! Thank you so much for this essay. I was surprised that you made an essay about gender role. I hope that we could do something about it. Please take note of the corrections that I made for you. See you~!