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작성자 : kwa***   ·   2016-02-18

There is a sad love story of Heloise and Abelard that should not happen in reality. They love each other-Heloise is the professor and Abelard is the student but how? Their age gap is huge-it may be at least 10 years. What kind of parents would let their daughter or son to marry with the person who is 10 years older her/him? In Korea, people would not respect them as husband and wife-they will look at them strangely. Not only people’s thoughts, for their future kids, they should not love each other. The children will laugh at that kid, by having strange parents and other adults will tell rumors. If Heloise and Abelard cannot block or stop the rumor going on, they should not marry for both their future and their fature-kid.They should not love and marry each other with out considering what will happen next-they should be responsible.

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There is the sad love story of Heloise and Abelard that should not happen in reality. They loved each other - Heloise is a professor and Abelard is a student, but how? Their age gap is huge - it may be at least 10 years. What kind of parents would let their daughter or son marry a person who is 10 years older than her/him? In Korea, people would not respect them as husband and wife - they will look at them strangely. Not only people's thoughts, for their future kids, they should not love each other. Other children will laugh at their child, by having strange parents and other adults will spread rumors. If Heloise and Abelard cannot block or stop the rumors from going on, they should not get married for both their future and their future kid. They should not love and marry each other without considering what will happen next. They should be responsible.

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