When I was young, I watched to the a magic show.
I am was very excited because I would watched a magic show for the first time.
The magic show was very full fun. I rememberd the bird appeared  in the empty hat!!
But I rememberd a very very bad story.
The A snake was appeared at once. It was looked so like scary.
At that moment, the magician lifted the snake . and it came to our family. and hung all of family's  on  our necks.
I began  to cry and cry. But my sister just laughed.
I can't understand untill know. My sister is brave until know.
Anyway, I will always rememberd la that very bad magic show.
But I like magic shows!

When I was young, I watched a magic show.
I was very excited because I would watch a magic show for the first time.
The magic show was full fun. I remember the bird appeared in the empty hat!!
But I also remember a very bad story.
A snake appeared at once. It looked so scary.
At that moment, the magician lifted the snake and  it came to our family and hung on our necks.
I began to cry and cry. But my sister just laughed.
I can't understand until now. My sister is brave until now.
Anyway, I will always remember that very bad magic show.
But I like magic shows!

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