회원가입 로그인

학습방

원어민 일대일 맞춤 회화 수업 토크펀! 영어 정복의 꿈을 이루세요!

영작문첨삭

New Year

작성자 : liz***   ·   2016-02-14

New Year

On New Year's day, I went to My father's House and My great grandfather's House
WHen I'm in my father's House, I watchT TV.And i made pankake.Pankake tasted tsty.
And when I'm in My great grandfather house, I played with My Kind two cousin.
And when I'm in My grandma and grandfa's house, I played Yunnori whith My four kind cousin. and I played rock-paper-scissors. I's very fun Beacause I always win.And sometime, I feel boring. Beacause My cousin always louse but she always smile.
and back to My father house,again, I perform ancestral rites.
The End, at Night,watched TV about music and I see EXID.
It's very Happy New Year.

답변

New Year

On New Year's day, I went to both My father and my great grandfather's house. When I was in my father's house, I watched TV. AlsoI made pancakes. The pancakes tasted good.
When I was in my great grandfather's house, I played with my two kind cousins.
I played Yunnori with my four kind cousins in my grandparent's houseWe also played rock-paper-scissors. It's very fun because I always win. there were times I got bored  because my cousin always lose but she always smile.
Going back to my father's house, We performed ancestral rites.
At Night, we watched a show on TV about music and I saw EXID.
It's a very Happy New Year.

BE MINDFUL OF THE FOLLOWING:


Capitalization rules
Tenses
Articles
Adjectives
Subject-Verb agreement
Spelling
Sentence construction
Articles


목록으로