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My Life at 40...

작성자 : mad***   ·   2015-12-22

I hope that my life will be successful. I will be a doctor which is a job that I want to be and I will help many people who have diseases but, don't have any money for free and will make home for them. Also, I will participate on charity, too.
And I will use my English skill for go to abroad, espacially poor countries that many people have diseases and poor, to diagnose sick people.

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I hope that my life will be successful. I will be a doctor which is a job that I want to do and I will help many people who have diseases but, don't have money. I will help them for free, I will also give them a home. I will participate on charity, too. 
I will use my English skill to go abroad, especially to poor countries where there are many people with diseases and no money, I will help sick people.

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