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keeping my body healthy
작성자 : sh1*** · 2015-11-22
If you want to keep your body healthy, then you shold just do 2 thigs. Now,
this paragraph is abaut how to keep your body healthy.
1.Do a lot of exercise.
Our body needs to have less fat. By exercise, we can have those fat out. So we
need to do exercise.
2.Eat lots of good food.
Good food has low fat and lots of energy we need. It might be yucky,but it is
Good for our health.
Now I guess you will know how to keep your body healthy.
this paragraph is abaut how to keep your body healthy.
1.Do a lot of exercise.
Our body needs to have less fat. By exercise, we can have those fat out. So we
need to do exercise.
2.Eat lots of good food.
Good food has low fat and lots of energy we need. It might be yucky,but it is
Good for our health.
Now I guess you will know how to keep your body healthy.
답변
If you want to keep your body healthy, then you should just do 2 things. Now,
this paragraph is about how to keep your body healthy.
1.Do a lot of exercise.
Our body needs to have less fat. By exercising, we can have those fats burned. So we
need to do exercise.
2.Eat lots of good food.
Good food has low fat and have lots of energy that we need. It might be yucky, but it is good for our health.
Now I guess you will know how to keep your body healthy.
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