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작성자 : diz***   ·   2015-11-06

People who are afraid of death are usually afraid of life.

People who are afraid of death don't challenge.
They choose safty and familiar road. When people fear danger, they do half-hearted(passive).
So usually they experience life's wonder less then the opposite people.
And some people never challenge scuba diving or travel to the Third world.
If we don't try those things or some unfamiliar , we can't change our view of life.

Thank you!

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People who are afraid of death are usually afraid of life.

People who are afraid of death don't challenge themselves.
They choose safe and common roads. When people fear danger, they do things half-heartedly (passive).
So, usually they experience life's wonder less than the opposite people.
Also, some people will never try scuba diving or travelling the Third World.
If we don't try those things or some unfamiliar things to us, we can't change our view of life.

Thank you!

Good day, Choi! I like your perspective about the people who are afraid of death. I appreciate your effort in doing your homework. Two thumbs up! Anyway, please check my corrections above.  

Be mindful of the following:
* Always complete your sentence. 
 
- People who are afraid of death don't challenge themselves.
- If we don't try those things or some unfamiliar things to us,
- When people fear danger, they do things half-heartedly (passive).

* half-hearted (adjective), half-heartedly (adverb) - we used adverbs to describe the verb in this sentence: 
- When people fear danger, they do things half-heartedly (passive).

* CAPITALIZATION & CHOICE OF WORDS

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