CORRECTION/S:

I love birthdays! I love it because I could get many presents. Also, my friends and my parents do what I like and say good words to me. When I was 7 years old and in a kindergarten, my teacher had given me a chance to do 'Perlust Leader' on my birthday. I was so happy that day. I am excited on my next birthday!!!

Things to improve on:
>modifier
>tenses
>choices of words

Thank you for doing your homework, Cindy!
Very Good!