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작성자 : may***   ·   2015-10-23

I think I can't live without the internet.
First, without the internet it is hard to get informations.
For example when someone need information about a library, the someone just go to it's web site and search for what someone need.
But without the internet, the someone have to know the number of a library call to it, and ask for informations.

Second I can't share our things.
We can make blogs and share our lives.
We can also make cafes and share our thoughes, informations or sometimes pictors about on subject.
But if we don't have the internet, well... we can share with our friends or familys, but we can't share with lots of people.

Finally, I can't watch animations, cartoons and movies.
These things is very important in my life.
Without these my life will be mizerable.

So these things are the reasons why I can't live without the internet.


+ Everyone!! Today is Friday!!!!!!

답변

I think I can't live without the internet.
First, without the internet it is hard to get informations. information
For example when someone  I need  information about a library, the  just go to it's  I can just search on the web site.
Without the internet, I have to know the number of a library,  to call and  
ask for
informations.  information

Second, I can't share our my things.
But if we I don't have the internet, well, we I can't share something with our my  friends or familys,  and family. but we can't share with lots of people.
Finally, I can't watch animations, cartoons and movies.

We With the internet, I can make blogs and share our lives.
We I can also make cafes and share our thoughes, thoughts, informations
information, or sometimes pictors   and  pictures. about on subject.

These things is are  very important in my life.
Without these my life will be mizerable.  miserable.

So these things are the reasons why I can't live without the internet.

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CONCEPTS TO STUDY:
Subject-Verb agreement
Pronouns
Spelling
Word usage

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Happy Friday, Stephanie!
Thank you for sharing your opinions regarding the importance of using the internet. It's indeed that we need the internet nowadays. With regards to your writing, please be guided by the corrections to aid your grammar and word
errors that you committed. Thank you, Stephanie!
See you in class!
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