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작성자 : krw*** · 2015-10-19
Dear home work Dairy,
today is saturday,I went to ebatom play ground to play with.because my friend go to incheon to live with.I was littie sad, how it cannot sad when my best friend go to another place to live?So I play with another friends. We play tom and Jerry, and tag. it was so fun but also tired. I wanted to more playing. so we play at play ground.it was so fun^^
Alice:P
today is saturday,I went to ebatom play ground to play with.because my friend go to incheon to live with.I was littie sad, how it cannot sad when my best friend go to another place to live?So I play with another friends. We play tom and Jerry, and tag. it was so fun but also tired. I wanted to more playing. so we play at play ground.it was so fun^^
Alice:P
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Today is Saturday, I went to Ebatom play ground to play because my friend moved to Incheon. I was a little sad, how can I not be sad when my best friend moves to another place to live? So I played with my other friends. We played Tom and Jerry and tag. It was so fun but also tiring. I wanted to play more, so we played at the playground. It was so fun^^
Alice:P
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