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About my cellphone

작성자 : cel***   ·   2015-10-01

Many people love to treat their cellphone. Of course I used to treat cellphone a few years ago.
When I went to taking a trip with my husband and my son 3 years ago, I loved to upload my pictures on Kakao story. Then my husband and my son complained me because I concentrated on doing Kakao story without enjoying traveling with my family. Then I was upset because I couldn't notice my behaviors. After then I have used my cellphone when I need to use cellphone as far as possible.
So my cellphone is not my bestfriend but useful friend.^^

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CORRECTION/S:

Many people love to treat their cellphone (as what?). Of course I used to treat my cellphone too a few years ago. 
When I went on a trip with my husband and my son 3 years ago, I loved to upload my pictures on Kakaostory. Then my husband and my son complained to me because I concentrated on doing Kakaostory and not enjoying traveling with my family. Then I was upset because I didn't realize my behavior. After that I only used my cellphone when I needed to.
So my cellphone is not my best friend but a useful friend.^^

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