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To be a good sun.........

작성자 : hee***   ·   2015-10-01

To be a good sun sun should has honesty and respect.We think "Mom likes study very well."But it isn't.Mom likes honesty and respect.But honesty is very hard
someday we not honesty.But we try to be honesty and we must respect parents.Because parents are older than me.So parents know large kowledge.We need honesty and respect

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Hello, David! I am happy to see that your essay is long. Here are the corrections made for you...



    ***********CORRECTED ESSAY OF DAVID WON***********

To be a good son, we should have honesty and respect. We thought that "moms want us to study very well," but it isn't only that. Moms want us to be honest and respectful. Being honest is very hard, sometimes we lie, but we should try to be honest, and we must respect our parents They are older than us, so they have much kowledge. Therefore, we need to be honest and respectful.




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REMEMBER:

>> SPELLING:
SON - the boy child of the parents
SUN - the fire of ball in the sky

>> Put a SPACE after a period (.).

>> Be direct to the point.
DAVID: someday we not honesty.
CORRECT: sometimes we lie.

>> Use the same pronoun all throughout the essay (WE).

>> Put an ending adverb to your essay.
THEREFORE - that is why

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