CORRECTION/S:

Here are some of the things I did in my recent Chuseok expereince:

1. Me and my family went to the amusement park.
2. I watched some movies.
3. I went to the place called "Safari."
4. I rode on a roller coaster.

Feedback/Suggestions/Reccomendations:

I do hope to see a real paragraph next time. This one is good but it needs numbers to sensibly put chronology on the sequence of events. Please try to give some more effort when writing a real compostion. I know you can do something better than what you usually give me.

Thank you very much.