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Relation between the advent of cell phone and people's lives

작성자 : cel***   ·   2015-09-24

The advent of the cell phone leads to change less conversation among people, for example among family, among friends.
Besides there is nearly time to stay alone. Anytime people call or send message to me and then I have to speak something, although I don't want to.
Thesedays smart phone prevents from reading books or newspapers. People watch vedio on internet or news on internet through their smart phone instead of reading books or newspapers.
I think people need to stay for only few days free from cell phone.

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The advent of the cell phone leads to changes such as less conversation among people, for example among family, and among friends.
Besides, there is nearly not enough time to be alone. Other people can call or send messages to me anytime and then I would have to say something to them, even if I don't want to.
These days smartphones prevent people from reading books or newspapers. People watch videos and news on the internet through their smartphones instead of reading books or newspapers. I think people need to stay free of their cell phone for a few days.

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