Hi, David! I'm glad to see your homework composition! I'm excited to read about your family.

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We are three in the family. My dad is a department manager, and my mom is a teacher. I love them. We have a good family because we have not secrects. If the family is secretive, then it is hard to trust. Therefore, families should be open to each other.

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>> Be familiar with the sentence construction, "We are three in the family." To make a sentence close to your given statement, then we can say, "My family is composed of 3 persons." Remember that after a number, we should use PERSONS instead of PEOPLE.

>> To avoid sounding like a song, you may combine your statements "My dad is a department manager. My mom is a teacher," into one using the preposition AND.

>> Always put A SPACE after the PERIOD [.].

>> Your statement, "To be a good family they have not secrecy," needs polishment because of the incoherence of the words used.

>> SECRETIVE refers to people who hide ​their ​feelings, ​thoughts, ​intentions, and ​actions from other ​people.

>> It would be better for us to use the word TRUST than BELIEVE since we are talking about THE FAMILY RELATIONSHIP.

>> Let's be direct by saying "FAMILIES SHOULD BE OPEN," than repeating the statement about SECRECY. The corrected statement is affirmative and gives the same thought as what you want to imply.


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There you have it, David! I can feel how much you love your parents. You are such a lucky kid to have them. What a wonderful family you have!

Love,
Teacher Ace