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작성자 : k11*** · 2015-09-21
Today is holiday.
So I went paseo {shopping mall name} for meet my friend and eat lunch.
My friend name is Chae min.
She said she will be late so she made socks doll for waiting her.
my Mom maid it for me and i helped my mom.
Finally she arrive.
We say hello each other then we went to lunch.
I ate steak,she ate pasta.It was so delicous.
After we lunch we went Mario lend.
Mario lend is game zone. we play car game and basket ball.
After finish game we went to play ground we ride swing and seasawand we ate
icecream.we made glass deco.
It was so good holiday
So I went paseo {shopping mall name} for meet my friend and eat lunch.
My friend name is Chae min.
She said she will be late so she made socks doll for waiting her.
my Mom maid it for me and i helped my mom.
Finally she arrive.
We say hello each other then we went to lunch.
I ate steak,she ate pasta.It was so delicous.
After we lunch we went Mario lend.
Mario lend is game zone. we play car game and basket ball.
After finish game we went to play ground we ride swing and seasawand we ate
icecream.we made glass deco.
It was so good holiday
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THANK YOU FOR DOING YOUR HOMEWORK, ANN! 
CORRECTIONS:
Today is holiday. I went to Paseo (shopping mall's name) to meet and eat lunch with my friend. My friend's name is Chae Min. She said that she will be late. While waiting, my mom and I made doll socks. Finally, she arrived. We said hello to each other and then immediately went out for lunch. I ate steak and she ate pasta. The foods were so delicious. After lunch, we went to Mario Land. Mario Land is a game zone. We play a car game and basketball. After playing games, we went to the playground. We rode in a swing and see-saw. We ate ice cream. We made a glass deco. It was a good holiday.
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GOOD JOB, ANN! 
