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작성자 : rub***   ·   2015-07-10

*Homework : Tell a story about the pictures that you have taken.*

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Intro - A girl is in front of the bronze statue.


Body - She wants to fall it down. She tried. Bronze statue is

about to fall down. Then, A man catched it when he saw a girl pushing it.


Ending - I think she is off the wall. It's very funny picture.

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In this picture, A girl is in front of the bronze statue. She wants to fall

it down. She tried and tried. Bronze statue is about to fall down. Then, A man

catched it when he saw a girl pushing it. I think she is off the wall. It's

very funny picture.

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CORRECTION/S:

Intro - A girl is in front of the bronze statue.



Body - She wants it to fall down. She tried to push it. The bronze statue is

about to fall down. Then, a man caught it when he saw the girl pushing it. 


Ending - I think she is off the wall. It's a very funny picture.

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In this picture, a girl is in front of the bronze statue. She wants it to fall down. She tried and tried to push it. The bronze statue is about to fall down. Then, A man caught it when he saw the girl pushing it. I think she is off the wall. It's a very funny picture.

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