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작성자 : sky*** · 2015-06-23
I go to a mall 5times a year. Or less........
I keep on asking my mom to buy something. I eat, and play. I want to buy the condo fairy princess kingdom of playmobile. It costs $50. I want it but I can't buy it.I need it to finish my colletion of playmobile.I am real glad that if I buy it.
I keep on asking my mom to buy something. I eat, and play. I want to buy the condo fairy princess kingdom of playmobile. It costs $50. I want it but I can't buy it.I need it to finish my colletion of playmobile.I am real glad that if I buy it.
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I go to a mall 5times a year. Or less........
I keep on asking my mom to buy something. I eat, and play. I want to buy the condo fairy princess kingdom of playmobile. It costs $50. I want it but I can't buy it.I need it to finish my colletion of playmobile.I am real glad that if I buy it.
I keep on asking my mom to buy something. I eat, and play. I want to buy the condo fairy princess kingdom of playmobile. It costs $50. I want it but I can't buy it.I need it to finish my colletion of playmobile.I am real glad that if I buy it.
>> I go to a mall max of five times a year. I keep on asking my mom to buy something (for me). I eat and play (at the mall). I want to buy the condo fairy princess kingdom of play mobile. It costs $50. I want to have it but I can't buy it. I need it to complete my collection of play mobile. I would be really glad if I would be able to buy it.
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