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작성자 : seo*** · 2015-06-02
According to the news, 60% of Koreans have a experience of doing diet.
40% of Koreans told the reasons that doing diet is to get a slimmer bodys,
42% of Koreans told that its because of health, and 18% of Koreans told
the reason is to recover the confidence.
Every entertainer is slim and cool, every news tells that there is a lot
of people who are fat became sick and everyone say that it looks so good
when their entertainer successed on diet.
All the teenagers want to get slimmer body than their friends.
They think slim is equal to beauty. Why do we want a slimmer body?
I don't know, maybe we want to be same like other persons?
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Why do Koreans go on a diet?
According to the news, 60% of Koreans go on a diet.
40% of Koreans said that dieting could make their body slim,
42% of Koreans said that it's because of health concerns, and 18% of Koreans said that it would boost their confidence.
Every entertainer is slim and cool. On the news, there is a lot
of people who are fat became sick due to dieting. They say that they look so good when they succeed in dieting.
All the teenagers want to have a slim body than their friends.
They think being slim is beautiful. Why do we want a slim body?
I don't know, maybe we want to be like other people?
Note:
*go on a diet
*Diet can be a verb or a noun.
*boost - to increase or improve something
*the news - information on television, radio and in newspapers about important things that have just happened
Sarah, read the composition again and analyze the corrections made in it. Good composition, though. See you in class! :)