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작성자 : shi***   ·   2015-03-25

Sports that we can do easily.
Do you have an electrical bicycle in your house?
Most of people let electrical bicycle for sports and exercising. They think it would be a nice sport for their health and fat burning. However, I would prefer to go out and walk around a park that is close to your house.
A lot of people goes for a walk around a park after supper. And that is good for health and fat burning, too. So like you are going on an exercise after eating, you should exercise some times when we have time.
Walking in a morning helps a lot for people's brain, too, because it helps people breathe nice and cool air and make them wake up from the long sleep. That is why I am telling you that jogging and walking is the nicest exercise.
And they are also making our heart healthy and make you live longer than not exercising.

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Sports that we can do easily.
Do you have an electrical bicycle in your house?
Most of people  use electrical bicycle for sports and exercising. They think it would be a nice sport for their health and for burning fat. However, I would prefer to go out and walk around a park that is close to my house.
A lot of people goes for a walk around a park after supper. And that is good for health and for burning fat too, like when you are going on an exercise after eating, you should exercise some times when you have time.
Walking in the morning helps a lot for people's brain, too, because it helps people breathe nice and cool air and make them wake up from the long sleep. That is why I am telling you that jogging and walking are the nicest exercise.
And they are also making our heart healthy and make us live longer than not exercising.

Fair point well made, Julie! good job!

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