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-bella

작성자 : hw0***   ·   2015-03-24

abrasion ; graze, cut. An abrasion is an area on a person's body where the skin has been scraped.
Experience: I was riding bike with my dad. Because my dad ride a bike better than me, he ride faster and faster. So, I ride my bike faster and faster to follow my dad. But, there was a edge that is pointed out, so, wheel of my bike trippled, and it overflowed. I flew to the ground, and I scrapped, blood was pouring at my knees, my dad comed and cleaned my knees. The next day, my knees were bruised and scratched. It was very painful, but it cured quickly.

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abrasion ; graze, cut. An abrasion is an area on a person's body where the skin has been scraped.

Experience: I was riding bike with my dad.
> Experience: I was riding a bike with my dad.


Because my dad ride a bike better than me, he ride faster and faster.
> Because my dad rides a bike better than me, he pedaled faster and faster.


So, I ride my bike faster and faster to follow my dad.
> So, I did the same thing to follow him.


But, there was a edge that is pointed out, so, wheel of my bike trippled, and it overflowed.
> But as I was pedaling , I stumbled when I crashed my bicycle into a (curb)?.


I flew to the ground, and I scrapped, blood was pouring at my knees, my dad comed and cleaned my knees.
> I fell on the ground, and I scraped my knees, blood was dripping from it. My dad came and cleaned my wound.

'The next day, my knees were bruised and scratched.
> Correct!


It was very painful, but it cured quickly.
> It was very painful, but it healed quickly.

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