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작성자 : rub*** · 2015-03-20
My homework was 'writing a letter to my parents'!
So, I will write a letter to my parents.
Dear my parents,
Hello, I'm your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
I will write a letter to you.
I think I am a lucky girl. You know why, don't you? I have a good parents. So, l want to appreciate to you. First, I want to appreciate to you,mom. You are very kind. You listen my story every day so you are a good listener, I think.
Finally, I want to appreciate to you, dad. You are very smart and kind. So, you teaches me math. You plays me on the weekends at home.
Thank you. But,I think I am naughty. I have to be a good daughter.I try to get up early and study hard.
Bye!
Love,
Your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
So, I will write a letter to my parents.
Dear my parents,
Hello, I'm your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
I will write a letter to you.
I think I am a lucky girl. You know why, don't you? I have a good parents. So, l want to appreciate to you. First, I want to appreciate to you,mom. You are very kind. You listen my story every day so you are a good listener, I think.
Finally, I want to appreciate to you, dad. You are very smart and kind. So, you teaches me math. You plays me on the weekends at home.
Thank you. But,I think I am naughty. I have to be a good daughter.I try to get up early and study hard.
Bye!
Love,
Your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
답변
Ruby's Homework:
Dear my parents,
Hello, I'm your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
I will write a letter to you.
I think I am a lucky girl. You know why, don't you? I have a good parents. So, l want to appreciate to you. First, I want to appreciate to you,mom. You are very kind. You listen my story every day so you are a good listener, I think.
Finally, I want to appreciate to you, dad. You are very smart and kind. So, you teaches me math. You plays me on the weekends at home.
Thank you. But,I think I am naughty. I have to be a good daughter.I try to get up early and study hard.
Bye!
Love,
Your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
Hello, I'm your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
I will write a letter to you.
I think I am a lucky girl. You know why, don't you? I have a good parents. So, l want to appreciate to you. First, I want to appreciate to you,mom. You are very kind. You listen my story every day so you are a good listener, I think.
Finally, I want to appreciate to you, dad. You are very smart and kind. So, you teaches me math. You plays me on the weekends at home.
Thank you. But,I think I am naughty. I have to be a good daughter.I try to get up early and study hard.
Bye!
Love,
Your daughter, Nah kyoung(Ruby).
Correct:
Dear Mom and Dad,
Hello, I'm your daughter Nah Kyoung (Ruby). I'm writing a letter to you to say that I am a lucky girl. You know why? Because I have a good parents. I really appreciate you and I am thankful. First, I want to say thank you mom, because you are very kind.You listen to my stories everyday, so I think you are a good listener. Finally, I want to say that I appreciate you dad. You are smart and kind, you are also teaching me in my math subject. You even play with me on the weekends at home.
Thank you but I think I've been naughty. I will be a good daughter, I will try to get up early and study hard. Bye!
Love,
Your daughter, Nah Kyoung (Ruby)
Explanation:
~ I rephrased some of the sentences and words to make it more understandable. When writing a letter try to make a point per paragraph, and make sure you use correct punctuation, spelling and grammar.
Note:
Thank you for submitting your homework Ruby, you did a great job. Just study some of the corrections that was made from your homework and keep on practicing. FIGHTING!
I hope you had a great weekend. I'll see you in the class.
~Teacher Gee^^