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flowers are better then vegetables?

작성자 : shi***   ·   2015-03-11

Flowers are better then vegetables?
Do you know 화전? It is Korea's traditional food.
It looks like rice cake decorated with flowers. We make it with some special flowers. Those flowers were really delicious and healthy. There were azaleas for ezample. Azaleas were really pretty and sweet. Every one liked azaleas.
However, royal azalea was really dangerous then azalea. It was poisoned. When you eat it you could be dead, too. So some people died because they thought that royal azalea was azalea and eat it.
So that is why I think flowers are nice and healthy, but they are not nice then vegetables. Vegetables are less poisoned. So we can eat a lot of vegetables. No one knows the new flowers that grows up can be poisoned. So I think all of us should know what we are eating are dangerous or poisoned. Expecailly for children.

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Flowers are better then vegetables?

> Are flowers better than vegetables?
Note: Form correct interrogative sentences.

Do you know ?­??? It is Korea's traditional food.
> Correct!

It looks like rice cake decorated with flowers.
> It looks like a rice cake decorated with flowers.
Note: Do not forget your articles (a,an,the).

We make it with some special flowers.
> Correct!

Those flowers were really delicious and healthy.
> Those flowers are really delicious and healthy.
Note: A simple present tense is used to talk about facts. It is also used to make generalizations about people or things.

There were azaleas for ezample.
> There are azaleas for example.
Note: Be careful with your spelling.

Azaleas were really pretty and sweet. Every one liked azaleas.

> Azaleas are really pretty and sweet. Every one likes azaleas.
Note: We use a singular verb for pronouns like everyone, everybody, someone, no one, etc.

However, royal azalea was really dangerous then azalea.
> However, royal azalea is really dangerous compared to azalea.

It was poisoned.
> It is poisonous.

 When you eat it you could be dead, too.
> Also, you can die if you eat it.
Note: I reconstructed your sentence to make it clearer.

So some people died because they thought that royal azalea was azalea and eat it.

> So some people died because they thought that royal azalea was azalea and ate it.  
Note: Be mindful of your verb tense.

So that is why I think flowers are nice and healthy, but they are not nice then vegetables.
> So that is why I think flowers are nice and healthy food, but they are not better than vegetables.

Vegetables are less poisoned.
> Vegetables are less poisonous.

So we can eat a lot of vegetables.
> Correct!

No one knows the new flowers that grows up can be poisoned.
> Some people do not know that some flowers can be poisonous.
Note: I reconstructed your sentence to make it clearer.

So I think all of us should know what we are eating are dangerous or poisoned. Expecailly for children.
> So I think all of us should know if what we are eating are dangerous or poisonous, especially for children.

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