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good sides of online&video games

작성자 : seh***   ·   2015-02-17

Many parents think that online or video games are harmful for their children. But, there are some good sides in them. By doing games with friends, they’ll become intimate. Also, children can get rid of stress. And during the game, they can chat with new friends, so they can make more personal connections. Not all of the games are harmful for children. The problem is that some children can’t control themselves, and it can develop as ‘overdose’. But to control ourselves and make a decision what is good and what is a violent game, video games can be good for the children in some way.


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Many parents think that online or video games are harmful for their children.
>> Many parents think that online or video games are harmful to their children.
But, there are some good sides in them.
>> But there are also some advantages.
By doing games with friends, they???ll become intimate.
>> By playing with friends, they'll become intimate.
Also, children can get rid of stress.
And during the game, they can chat with new friends, so they can make more personal connections.
Not all of the games are harmful for children.
>> Not all of the games are harmful for children.
The problem is that some children can???t control themselves, and it can develop as ???overdose???.
>> The problem is that some children can???t control themselves, and it can become an addiction.
But to control ourselves and make a decision what is good and what is a violent game, video games can be good for the children in some way.
>> But to control ourselves, we need to tell the difference between what is good and what is a violent game. Video games can be good for children in some ways.

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