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Education Revolution

작성자 : shi***   ·   2015-01-30

If I could make an education, I would like to make a edcation that makes the students feel free.
First, There are 5 classes each day and 1of them would be a project to find their dreams and play and make - up things. They could also learn something they want to know about their dreams coming true. After class and when recess come, they go to the pet zoo in the school or can do everything they want to do. And when they finish the whole class, they will have a P.E class and that class will make them fell with energy.
At science class,, we will show some story about scientists and then have a experiment. Each of them will have a partener and those two are going to write down some paragraph of the experiment.
At math class, each will have a time to ask or learn from teachers or friends.
The teachers are making sure that they know why is the answer is correct or wrong.

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If I could make an education, I wouldlike to make a edcation that makes the students feel free.

>> If I can change the educationsystem, I would change it into a system that will make the studentsfeel free.


First, There are 5 classes each day and1of them would be a project to find their dreams and play and make -up things.

>> First, there would be fiveclasses each day and one of them would be a project to find theirdreams, play, and create things.


They could also learn something theywant to know about their dreams coming true.

>> They would also learnsomething that would help make their dreams come true.


After class and when recess come, theygo to the pet zoo in the school or can do everything they want to do.

>> During recess, they may go toa petting zoo in the school or do anything they wish to.


And when they finish the whole class,they will have a P.E class and that class will make them fell withenergy.

>> At the end of the day, theywill have a P.E. class where they will be filled with energy.

At science class,, we will show somestory about scientists and then have a experiment.

>> In Science class, we willdiscuss a story about a scientist and then have an experiment.


Each of them will have a partener andthose two are going to write down some paragraph of the experiment.

>> The students will be paired upand they are going to write some paragraph about the experiment.


At math class, each will have a time toask or learn from teachers or friends.

>> In Math class, each will havetime to ask or learn from their teacher and friends.


The teachers are making sure that theyknow why is the answer is correct or wrong.

>> The teachers will explain andmake sure that they know why the answer is correct or incorrect.

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