Hello, Paul! Thank you for passing your homework. I'm impressed with your sentence construction skill! Kindly take note of some minor corrections. I'll
see you in class, Paul! Take care!

~ Teacher Mary

Hello, my name is Paul and I am now turning into 4th grade. I live in Gyeong gi-do Bundang which is near Seoul. My hobby is reading books (like fantasy books). My favorite book is the Harry Potter series. Also, my favorite sports is playing basketball because it gives me more strength, concentration and joy. Another thing I would like to talk about is my family. I have 6 people in my family. My mom, my dad, my brother, my grandmother, my grandfather and me. My mom is a housewife and my dad is a doctor. This is the end of introducing myself. Have a nice day^^.

> The pronoun I is always written in capital letter.
> Proper nouns, such as Seoul and Harry Potter, should also be written in capital letters
> In your sentence with the conjunction also, there should be a comma after if it is written at the start of the sentence. Other examples are: therefore, moreover, however, etc.