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작성자 : hjh*** · 2015-01-19
I agree that students should not use cellphone.
It is because some students do the cellphone game for a long time.
It's so bad and not healthy.
This is why I think that students should not use cellphone.
It is because some students do the cellphone game for a long time.
It's so bad and not healthy.
This is why I think that students should not use cellphone.
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I agree that students should not use cellphone.
Correct!
It is because some students do the play cellphone games for a long time.
> I believe the word "play" is a proper word to use in this sentence.
It's so bad and not healthy.
Correct!
This is why I think that students should not use cellphone.
Correct!
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Hello Jenny!
Well done! You did well on this homework and I'm happy to see improvements. Please review the correction on the second sentence, though.
Keep on improving! 
- teacher Cindy