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작성자 : kgm*** · 2015-01-15
BOOK'S TITLE:DESERT LIFE
THis book's Charicter is Joonho and Nayeung and Uncle.
They go Egypt.
THey buy good.
And they take a bus and go pyramid.
And they ride a camel and go and go and go....
But happen stom.
They locked desert.
THis book's Charicter is Joonho and Nayeung and Uncle.
They go Egypt.
THey buy good.
And they take a bus and go pyramid.
And they ride a camel and go and go and go....
But happen stom.
They locked desert.
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Andrew's Homework:
BOOK'S TITLE:DESERT LIFE
THis book's Charicter is Joonho and Nayeung and Uncle.
They go Egypt.
THey buy good.
And they take a bus and go pyramid.
And they ride a camel and go and go and go....
But happen stom.
They locked desert.
THis book's Charicter is Joonho and Nayeung and Uncle.
They go Egypt.
THey buy good.
And they take a bus and go pyramid.
And they ride a camel and go and go and go....
But happen stom.
They locked desert.
Corrections:
Andrew: THis book's Charicter is Joonho and Nayeung and Uncle.
correct: The characters in the story are Joonho, Nayeung and uncle.
explanation: check your spelling.
Andrew: They go Egypt. THey buy good. And they take a bus and go pyramid.
correct: They go to Egypt, they buy goods and take a bus and go to the pyramid.
Explanation: Proper use of run-on sentence. Use comma between two complete sentences where a period should actually be used.
Andrew: And they ride a camel and go and go and go....
correct: They ride a camel and continue their journey.
Andrew: But happen stom. They locked desert.
The storm came and they were locked in a desert.
Explanation: Your sentence construction is fragmented. A fragment is a sentence which is not complete, and therefore not grammatically correct.
Thank you for submitting your book report Andrew! Keep practicing to enhance your writing skill, study the corrections that I have made. If you have any questions don't hesitate to approach the teacher in the class. And also when you write an essay or book report consistency of Tense (past tense, present tense and future tense) is very important so the readers will not be confused. Job well done! I'll see you in the class and enjoy your weekend!
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