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작성자 : shi***   ·   2015-01-14

How to avoid appearance - based discrimination

I heard that in salary, a lot of people who is handsome earns money a lot. It could be nice at acting actors. However, It is rude at other works. When that people is good at studying, but not handsome, he could not be selected. If I am the selector, I will prefer that man than the handsome and stupid man. And for that I will make myself out from the appearance - based discrimination.
At school, sometimes a boy who is handsome is popular, a girl who is beautiful is popular. That is really unfair. Someone else want to be popular, not follower.
I sometimes think that someone sho hadn't did some nice clothes is not to good. But it is not. We have to get ourself out from appearance - based discrimination.

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Hi, Julie! very well said. I agree with you on this. Just be mindful of the corrections below as well as the spelling of words. Thank you!

How to avoid appearance - based discrimination

I heard that in salary, a lot of people who is handsome earns money a lot. It could be nice at acting for actors. However, It is rude at for other type of works. When that people is good at studying, but not handsome, he could not be selected. If I am the selector, I will prefer that man than the handsome and stupid man. And for that I will make myself out from the appearance - based discrimination.
At school, sometimes a boy who is handsome is popular, a girl who is beautiful is popular. That is really unfair. Someone else want to be popular, not follower.
I sometimes think that someone sho who hadn't did worn some nice clothes is not to good. But it is not. We have to get our self out from appearance - based discriminatio

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