BELLA: In Korea, some families just stay at home and celebrate Christmas smally. And others go outside and celebrate very big. For example, almost all of my friends just stayed at home and did phone or celebrate in house. And also, many couples go to amusement parks or restaurants. I saw them at Seoul land, which is amusement park. And I saw a lot of families, too. In addition, many couples spend Christmas day with their girl friends or boy friends. However, I think they have to spend Christmas time with their family.

-Bella

CORRECT: In Korea, some families just stay at home and celebrate Christmas simply while others go outside and celebrate extravagantly. For example, almost all of my friends just stayed at home and played with their cellphones or celebrated in their house. There are also many couples who go to amusement parks or restaurants. I saw them at Seoul land, the amusement park. I saw a lot of families too. In addition, many couples spend Christmas day with their girl friends or boy friends. However, I think they have to spend Christmas time with their family.

-Bella

EXPLANATION: Some sentences were rephrased. Be careful with the right words to use for your sentences. Use WHILE when you are comparing two objects In your sentences. Use PAST TENSE of the verb when you are telling finished actions. Article THE is used to for definite nouns.

Hi Bella!

I am happy to know that you spent the Christmas day well with you family. Nothing beats the presence of our family during Christmas day.

Thank you for submitting your homework. Please take note of the few corrections that I gave you in order to express yourself well in sentences.

Advance Happy New Year to you and your family!

See you on our next class,

Teacher Serene ^_^