ZENIA: Last week, I learned about Tyler Swass. He is five years old but he knew how to dial 911. So he saved his mom when his mom had a seizure. Let me tell you about dangerous situations.
There are many dangerous situatuations. Firstly, we can be hit my a car while crossing the street. Next, we can be burned by fire or cut hen slicing. Also, we can hurt our bodies while playing sports.
So we have to learn how to stay safe. Parents or teachers tell us how to stay safe by showing or watching video. Firefighters and Police officer tell us with books. Last, we can learn how to stay safe ourself by reading books.
I also had dangerous situation. I fell down on high stairs when I was 6 years old. I went to hospital with my mom. I felt bad and upset.
There are many dangerous situations. So we have to learn how to stay safe. I also had dangerous situation, too. I hope everyone would not have any dangerous situation.

CORRECT: Last week, I learned about Tyler Swass. He is five years old but he knew how to dial 911 so he saved his mom when she had a seizure. Let me tell you about dangerous situations.
There are many dangerous situations. Firstly, we can be hit by a car while crossing the street. Next, we can be burned by fire or cut when slicing. We can also be hurt by playing sports.
We have to learn how to stay safe. Parents or teachers tell us how to stay safe by showing us a video. Firefighters and Police officers teach us through books. Lastly, we can learn on our own how to keep ourselves safe by reading books.
I also experienced to be in a dangerous situation. I fell down on the stairs when I was 6 years old. I went to the hospital with my mom. I felt bad and upset.
There are many dangerous situations so we have to learn how to stay safe. I already experienced one before. I hope everyone will not be in any dangerous situation.

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Hello Zenia!

I am glad to read what you have learned. Children nowadays should be alert to avoid being hurt and to be ready in case of emergency. What you shared was such a good thing!

I'll see you again in our class.

Always,
Teacher Serene ^_^