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What I want to give classmates for chirstmas.
작성자 : shi*** · 2014-12-22
I want to give some christmas presents to my classmates. There are a lot, but I will just say several things.
I want to give my hole class the book, Dork Diries. It is good for school kids. And I hope they can learn some good things at that book. However, I don't think I can because it is expensive.
So I think I can give them Some chocolate, candys. They will be the most delicious one they ever tasted. Anywawy, the teachers won't let me though. They hate children getting or bringing candys at school. I have to give them secretly.
The important part is that, what present we are giving, the nice thing is that we can be more friendly and happy. all of us. Even me!
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Student : What do I want to give for christmas.
Correct : What do I want to give for christmas?
Explanation : We use a question mark if your sentence is a question.
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Student : I want to give some christmas presents to my classmates.
Correct : I want to give some Christmas presents to my classmates.
Explanation : 'Christmas' is a proper noun that is why it should start in a capital letter.
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Student : There are a lot, but I will just say several things.
Explanation : CORRECT !
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Student : I want to give my hole class the book, Dork Diries.
Correct : I want to give my whole class the book "The Dork Diaries".
Explanation : Be careful with the spelling of whole and diaries. Quotation marks set off the titles of things that do not normally stand by themselves: short stories, poems, and articles.
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Student : It is good for school kids.
Explanation : CORRECT!
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Student : And I hope they can learn some good things at that book.
Correct : I hope they can learn some good things from that book.
Explanation : There is no need for the conjuction 'and' in this sentence. It is better to use from in this sentence because we use 'from' to express that something originates from something.
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Student :However, I don't think I can because it is expensive.
Explanation : CORRECT!
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Student : So I think I can give them Some chocolate, candys.
Correct : So I think I can give them some chocolates and candies.
Explanation : The word 'some' shouldn't be in capital letter. Chocolates should have 's' here because it's plural and be careful with the spelling of candies.
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Student : They will be the most delicious one they ever tasted.
Correct : They will be the most delicious one they have ever tasted.
Explanation : The verb 'have' is missing here.
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Student : Anywawy, the teachers won't let me though.
Correct : Anyway, the teachers won't let me though.
Explanation : Be careful with your spelling of 'anyway'.
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Student : They hate children getting or bringing candys at school.
Correct : They hate children getting or bringing candies at school.
Explanation : Be careful with the spelling of 'candies'.
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Student : I have to give them secretly.
Explanation : CORRECT!
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Student : The important part is that, what present we are giving, the nice thing is that we can be more friendly and happy. all of us. Even me!Correct : The important part is that, whatever present we are giving, the nice thing is that we can be more friendly and happy to everyone.
Explanation : I reconstructed the last part of your sentence to make it clearer.
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Hi Julie! I like your idea of giving sweets to your classmates and friends. However, I hope your teacher won't see you giving it to them. Be careful! ☺ I'm very happy with your homework. Keep up the good work. I'll see you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Louise 