I went to coex aquarium. 1 check in stepping into water fantasy if you walk through the water tank with its huge gate from the floor to the ceiling, you will step into the underwater world,leaving the real world behind. 2.rainbow louge exiting journey with an adventure map it shows you the special meaning of "trip to the ocean" 3.story of korean fish friendly site, lovely old landscape see all the familiar fish living in our country. things like that is what i felt. I went with my mom and my sister. I saw lots of fish. my favorite was Nemo. I ate Ice cream, pop corn and lots of other stuff. I had a great time. I wish we came back real soon.

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------>I went to Coex Aquarium. I went to check in stepping into water fantasy. If you walk through the water tank with its huge gate from the floor to the ceiling, you will step into the underwater world,leaving the real world behind. Next is the Rainbow lounge. It was sn exciting journey with an adventure map that shows you the special meaning of "trip to the ocean." Then we went to the Story of Korean fish. It has a friendly site, lovely old landscape where you can see all the familiar fish living in our country. Things like that are what I felt. I went with my mom and my sister. I saw lots of fish. My favorite was Nemo. Lastly, I ate Ice cream, pop corns and lots of other stuff. I had a great time. I wish we could come back real soon.

*Remember to always indent the first sentence of the paragraph. Since you are writign your trip experience you msut also include yourself in the sentence by using the pronoun 'I'. Since you are talking baout the places you've been one after another, it is better if you will arrange it by the help of the following words such as: First, next, then and lastly. Put it mind also that Proper nouns always starts with a capital letter whereever you put them in the sentence.

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Hi Claire ?¾,

        Thank you very much for submitting your homework. Did you really write all of this? I don't really get the thought, Claire. The sentences donn't provide a complete thought. I hope you learned something from that trip and those memories recalled while you are writing this paragraph. Remember that you must always put your heart in writing composition.

Love,

Teacher Jhen