Sally: If I found a suitcase full of 1000000 dollar, I would go to tour of every country.
CORRECT: If I found a suitcase full of 1000000 dollar, I would go to tour of every country.
EXPLANATION:
a. You can remove to and of.

Sally: And I would by my apartment.
CORRECT: I would buy my own apartment.
EXPLANATION:
a. In formal writing, we do not start a sentence with conjunctions such as AND, FOR, BUT, BECAUSE etc.
b. Be careful with spelling.
c. We use the word OWN to say that we are not gonna be needing help from others.

Sally: I would also by my clothes or I want to get it.
CORRECT: I would also buy my own clothes or whatever I want.
EXPLANATION:
a. Be careful with spelling.
b. We use the word OWN to say that we are not gonna be needing help from others.
c. Please make the thought clear.

Sally: Then I buy my parent's want it. And I go to travel with my family.
CORRECT: Then I will buy whatever my parents want and I will go to travel trip with my family.
EXPLANATION:
a. Please make the thought clear.
b. TRAVEL = verb. We can say "I will travel with my family."
TRAVEL TRIP = noun.

Sally: As well as, I change my ih the house all of thing.
CORRECT: I will change everything in my house.
EXPLANATION:
a. As well as is used to denote two things having similarities.
b. We use WILL+VERB to denote things that will take action in the future.

Sally: Last, I hold a fund-rasing to poor people n need.
CORRECT: Last, I will hold a fund-raising for poor people in need.
EXPLANATION:
a. LASTLY = synonymous to finally.
LAST = determines a noun.
b. Be careful with spelling.
c. We use "FOR"to denote people whom we want to do something in benefit of.

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