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cell phones ban in school
작성자 : shi*** · 2014-12-03
Today, most of children are using cell phone. Their parents want them to. They are worring that chldren might be kidnapped or hurt. So they give their children cell phone when they go to school. Teachers doesn't like it. Children use it to text in class time. And some people calls them while they study. It interrupts the class. I think bringing cell phone to school is not good idea.
The teachers tried to stop them bringing cell phones. However, the problem is that their parents were not listening to the teachers. So teachers gave the chidren the 'service for children protecting'to all parents. Though, children are still bringing cell phones for no reasons. I hope they don't cheat with them.
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Julie : Today, most of children are using cell phone.
Correct : Today, most of the children are using cell phone.
Explanation : We use 'the' in front of a noun.
Julie : They are worring that chldren might be kidnapped or hurt.
Correct : They are worrying that their children might be kidnapped or hurt.
Explanation : The use of possessive pronoun 'their' is needed here to show possession. Be careful with your spelling of 'worrying' and 'children'.
Julie : And some people calls them while they study.
Correct : And some people call them while they study.
Explanation : Your subject here is 'people' and it's in plural form that is why we need to use 'call' instead of 'calls'.
Julie : I think bringing cell phone to school is not good idea.
Correct : I think bringing cell phone to school is not a good idea.
Explanation : "A" signals that the noun modified is indefinite.
Julie : The teachers tried to stop them bringing cell phones.
Correct : The teachers tried to stop them from bringing cell phones.
Explanation : "From" is needed here because 'from' indicates the effect of something here.
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Hi Julie! I'm very happy with your homework because you did a splendid job! It was great! You were able to express yourself fully and you only had few grammar lapses and they are very minimal. You are improving day by day. Keep it up!
~Teacher Louise 